Where is my Happiness?

• Artist: exxxseada
• Description: This is some song lyrics I wrote because I was bored and kinda felt unhappy. Please comment!
• Date: 08/27/2009
• Tags: happiness life world

Sitting here in this empty room
Oh it seems it's past noon
Why do I feel so blue
Oh what can I do?

Oh where happiness
Oh why it come to this

Times I try so hard to just to find it
Oh moments I just wish to re-wind it
So where does my happiness go
Oh where does it go
I just don't know
I just don't know
Oh where does it go

One day in happiness
And others, just like this
So how can it be
Is this life for me

Just the moment that I know
That life is okay
The next day
Turns the other way
And just as all seems so perfect
I have to wonder
Is it all worth it

I try just so hard
Just to get just so far
I wonder is it just too much
Or just not enough
Why does it have to be
This way?

This day
I comes to this
Just trying to find happiness
In what I do
Is happiness through?

I had it just yesterday
But lost it on this day
I'll just keep on looking anyway
Because I shall find it one day
I believe that happiness
Is coming my way

Just I know where it comes from
I just have wonder why do I want it
Is an emotion that keeps you from sadness
I just want to know
Where is my happiness?

Comments

[The Fixxxer]

Just seems so plane like you know what your reading by the title of it. You need to change something. Like make it seem real like if this trurly how you felt.

[grim-knuckles]

I agree with the one before my comment, you have a good use and understanding of the words you are using, but where is the emotion?

[Sunafire]

I just didn't feel any real emotion in this poem, despite the fact it's about how you feel.
It's not bad, but just needs a little work, some imagery etc to make it powerful.