The Freedom Rebellion

• Artist: Evil Null Crystal
• Description: I had a random dream that i was in a rebellion group planning to destroy the government that enslaved the American population.
• Date: 02/01/2010
• Tags: rebellion

Government is in rule,
Everyone was an utter fool.
We've become their toys,
Men, women, girls, and boys.

Rifle in hand,
Freedom in demand.
the rebellion has commenced,
We will not be fenced.

We are not cattle,
We will fight this battle.
We will have to win,
So the rebirth can begin.

Started with fools,
It will end with our tools.
We will free all,
The governments rule will fall.

Everyone thought it was right,
But they were short in sight.
We won't be branded,
The final blow was landed.

But the rebellion is in force,
We show no remorse.
Not a terrorist or a hellion,
I'm part of the Freedom Rebellion.

We arent much, but we are strong.
We don't think that we'd last long.
In number small, barely large,
But that won't stop the beginning charge.

Comments

[Yureiaa Hearts]

Also, sounds very Slipknot 'Pulse of the Maggot'-ish. Thats all. ;p

[Yureiaa Hearts]

Pretty good, not bad at all.
My only small problem is with your 'staying within the same tense.'
Ex// "We don't think that we'd last long"
Do not vs. We would; Two different tenses.
Either Did not-We would (past tense) or Do not-We will (present tense)
That's all. ^___^;

[Ammiel Azarel]

Pretty good poem.