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I gently sat and looked around the place
Everywhere I saw a stranger’s face
Who is this man I saw deep in my dreams?
Where is this man I long to go and meet?
The birds sang high and made me want to cry
It’d been so long since I had heard his lie
He’d left me there to go pursue his dreams
And now I was alone, or so it seemed.
The sun shone bright and warmed my tear-stained face
And then I heard a noise in my secret place.
I looked around, confused and called out loud,
“Who is it that disturbs me? Come out now.”
A man stepped out from there behind the brush
His clothes were torn and he was bathed in dust
He laughed aloud and said he meant no harm,
Claimed he came from afar to see my charm.
I blinked, unsure of what it was he meant.
I’d seen him in no place that I had went.
But still, his face it seemed to me the same
As one I’d seen in my imagined game.
“Who is this man who comes before my eyes?”
I asked myself while staring at the sky.
He asked to sit beside me on the bench
He commented upon the singing finch.
We talked all day until the sun went down.
And when the moon came out he wore a crown.
My eyes went wide, I knew not what to say.
He sighed and told me that he could not stay.
A god I thought, a god indeed he was.
He sprouted wings, pure white, just like a dove’s.
The moonlit god ascended to the sky.
He shed a tear, we kissed and said goodbye.
- by MizfitPeep |
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- | Submitted on 02/08/2010 |
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- Title: The Moonlit God
- Artist: MizfitPeep
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Description:
An experiment with iambic pentameter.
In this poem, a young girl is plagued by visions of a man she has never met. Her love has just left her after years of a steady relationship, and she is beginning to give up on love. Then one day, as she is sitting alone in the park, the same man she dreamt about comes up to her. - Date: 02/08/2010
- Tags: moonlit poem starcrossed lovers
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Comments (4 Comments)
- majestic ace - 02/17/2010
- umm you need to work on the ending sort of kind of hard to understand but they area hrad i know.
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- MizfitPeep - 02/15/2010
- Thank you both! This is my first try at the poetry arena, so I'm glad it's going so well. ^^
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- ChaonLycos - 02/15/2010
- Good, but the ending is a little hard to interpret... did he leave her? A better question: Does it matter? No. 5/5
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- x_iiSnowflake - 02/09/2010
- Ohhhh. I really like this. A story poem. You don't see those much anymore! =] Good job, 5/5 and favorited. =] <3
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