BE~STRONG

• Artist: The princess of random
• Description: I WROTE THIS ALMOST A WEEK TO THE DAY BEFOR ME DAD PASTAWAY. IF YOU HAVE ANY (?)ABOUT HIM OR THE POEM JUST GO TO MY PRO AND READ THE ABOUTS OR WHAT EVER ITS CALLED...I WRIGHT SOME DARK FEELINGS
  
  
  YOUR EVER DARK CREATOR EIWAH~SHAELD
• Date: 05/02/2010
• Tags: strong

~Be-strong~

When dose she know.
She will never know. She waits, sitting there, waiting two see if he well gives in to it. Just waiting, hopping that it hasn't gotten that bad. She knows it will kill him. She just is being a fool for wanting him to live a longer life. 'Why god why him' she asks. She didn’t get that long with him just a lousy 9 years with him. She well mess him so bad...In every waking moment…She well. 'Why…Why do you let this dame s**t in the world' she can’t take it she wants to kill herself. But she cant she has to be strong for her mother for her father for her family back home.
And for herself, most importantly herself 'be strong be strong' she chants. It’s her song when she sleeps ay night it’s in her dreams. It’s in her mind chanting singing. 'be strong be strong' it gos deem as she fades into the night as she fades into the darkness as she fades into the hell with out HIM

i rought this almost a week to the day before my dad pastaway if you have any (?) about him or the poem just go to my pro and read the abouts or what ever its called i right sume dark stuff and have dark feelings


~Your ever dark creator riwah~shaeld~

Comments

[sanseu]

i can relate to this because my mom passed away when i was 13 for cancer and i asked mysef all those questions and more and the be strong is so much more than true especaly when you are young cause you dont want to show the hurt or the sadness you want to work through it but sometimes its to hard and you break down
all together great and well written......if it was intended to be a poem you should think about breaking it into lines and stanzas.
but i give it 5 stars

[brittany bloom]

My condolences- I'm sorry about your father. Since this really came from your heart, I don't feel I should critique it. I'm just gonna say really work on your spelling and punctuation.