Siren Hall

• Artist: Medicinal Fried Chicken
• Description: ok i wrote this about a month... or two ago then i used it on a language arts project
  
  i hope you like it, even though the first two stanzas are weaker then they should be
  
  they wouldn't be weak but i'm not really sure how to improve them, any suggestions?
• Date: 05/10/2010
• Tags: siren hall

Through the earth we fall

tumble in darkness, to the hall

where ancient sirens sleep

and we lay down to keep.


Immortal Darkness sends its pull

as we accept its mighty lull

thought of wonder to us flow

and we relent, for we shall know.


There amber eyes oven wide

where we are powerless to hide

proclamations burning black

turn us of longing what we lack.


And in the fire of their eyes there gleams

a serenity that falls past mortal dreams

shall we wonder again, at last

of what has come, and what will pass.

Comments

[Dark Rose Bella]

I LOVE THIS IT'S GREAT TO BAD I CAN ONLY GIVE YOU 5 STARS BRAVO!!!

[XxXMr_JizzXxX]

ammmmm.....defently for a difent kind of person....but 5

[King of Trash]

holy crap I love this poem! It's so brutaly Dark... The best kind of poetry in my opinion!!! and it was soo easy to read it just rolled off the page... 10/5...

[Lady GagaNYC]

Good job. I think it could be a little shorter and what is the message yur trying to put out with this poem. Its a little confusing but overall I like it