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Gouged out eyes
Sewn-up lips
One million lies
No more slips
Torn off ears
Severed hands
All my senses
They're less than bland
Not walking a path
But roaming his land
I've felt his wrath
In that cold hand
Clutching the entity
With eyes once brown
And words with such beauty
It wore my skin
And took my breath
I was the entity, and I did sin
- by maydaymouse |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/19/2010 |
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- Title: Tormented Entity
- Artist: maydaymouse
- Description: This basically just came to me at one point out of nowhere, like most of my other poems. But, overall I think that I did well. It's basically just what I think hell might be like, in a way that is. But please comment and rate me fairly. I would really appreciate some feedback!
- Date: 05/19/2010
- Tags: tormented entity
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Comments (6 Comments)
- green gir1 - 08/02/2010
- whoa sounds like a sadist
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- Pro Amy Shiko1991 - 06/27/2010
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BRAVO BRAVO!
You have quite the talent my dear! I must say it's been a very long time sense i meet or see someone with feel and pation in there words actaualy showing threw wht they right! 5/5! - Report As Spam
- niNja_sockiiZ - 06/21/2010
- OH. MY. GOD. this is my favorite. hands down. faaaaaaaantastically amazingly just wow.
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- magic_doglover - 06/19/2010
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excellent. wonderful imagery, however grotesque. 3nodding
5/5 - Report As Spam
- Ultima011 - 06/17/2010
- This just came from nowhere?!?!?! If that's the case then you have an amazing talent for writing poetry. Keep up the good work. 5/5
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- XxDireFangxX - 05/28/2010
- the poem is pretty awsome for something you just happened to come up with, but either way i love it 5/5
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