We Dream of Living

• Artist: I Am Teh Antichrist
• Description: Wrote this recently, just want to get some opinions on it. It follows an 8 count scheme, switches to 5 for the last two lines because I wanted to make those stand out. Enjoy, and please comment.
• Date: 11/03/2010
• Tags: dream living death

As we sleep, the world moves forward.
We beg for it to take us back.

As we sleep, we dream of living,
we dream of having something more.
Regretting things left unfinished
and of things we have left unsaid.

We wonder, if it would be better
to remain broken under this
cold, cold earthly tomb that holds us.

We dream of skies that shine brighter
and a world with far less to fear.

As we sleep, we dream of something...
we dream of our heavens, or hells.
Questioning if this is a lie
and wondering how long we dreamt.

We realize, only too soon
that we can only dream of life
and death consumes our empty thoughts.

We dream, and desire, and fail.
Six feet holds us back like steel chains.

As we sleep... as we sleep, nothing,
ever springs forth from death sealed eyes
which only see lost images
and memories that never die.

We dream of living, in our world,
and all our dreams become our lives.

Which we live alone.

Six feet below yours.

Comments

[iiRicin]

It's a great piece, and I loved how you worded it I love the last few lines, this takes me away.

[DarkRain4]

Your schemes, it had the desired effect. The ring of finality was great, and the last line was pretty chill-worthy and true.

[DarkRain4]

It's really great in my opinion, captures one of the thousands of possibilities of death in a strikingly written way, the air around it gives off the right feel. I also really like how you switched

[DarkRain4]

This is really incredible. I've often thought about what it must be like to be dead, and to mourn the things you were never able to accomplish, it's terrifying to me. I have to admit, at first I thought your poem was about everyday sleeping dreams, but that's only because I was paying half attention.