Depression is my Friend

• Artist: emowriter914
• Description:
• Date: 11/04/2010
• Tags: depression friend

"Stop saying defeat has overwhelmed you.
Stop putting yourself down"
Vioces ecoe in my mind.
Depression hugs me like a lost friend tight in a never ending embrace.

Comments

[brittany bloom]

Punctuation~
Your 3rd line has a couple spelling errors

It seems to me since depression is your friend, its voice would be the one echoing in your mind- but then I doubt it would be saying such peppy stuff. Maybe you should describe the voices better so readers can get a sense of whos saying what.I wish this was longer. Not that poems need to be long, but I think you need to go more in depth with your feelings so that the slightly abstract meaning becomes a little clearer.