Fall

• Artist: unini3
• Description: Yes, i know short. I wrote this one in class. :) comment and rate please!
• Date: 11/06/2010
• Tags: fall orange season unini3 leaves

Summer has passed and now comes fall,
i hear all the wondrous colored leaves call,
we are all falling,
yellow, orange and red,
i think its time that we now shed
the wind blows them all away
and i still hear the leaves all say
we are falling
and scattered on the cold floor
and in the spring the tree will grow more
but now we lay and rest till then
until the season of fall will end

Comments

[DarkRain4]

You have a main focus, but it seems like your thoughts were sort of scattered. Like you didn't put them in the best order you could have to showcase your meaning. But the personification was very nice. Maybe if you're in a poery class you could ask your teacher about it?