The Struggle of the Soul

• Artist: rawritsjill
• Description: A poem I wrote a while ago, finally decided to share it and maybe get some opinions.
• Date: 12/23/2010
• Tags: struggle soul

horrible feelings
senile thoughts
i cannot get out
i'm locked in this box

you try to get me out
you try to set me free
if only i could tell you,
that the devil's holding me

you wish for my comfort
you long for my needs
Please help me get out
i'm struggling to breathe

As i take my last breath
you call out my name
i whisper "i love you"
before he takes me away

i hope for your happiness
i ache for your hug
dont cry for me now,
im already gone

Comments

[I screwed Princess Peach]

it's good. i know the story(or maybe not)
i don't like the rhyming at the end. but, that's just me.
anyways, good entry. thanks for sharing