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Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 9:28 am
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Posted: Sun May 08, 2011 11:11 am
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:19 pm
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:57 pm
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egoxromantic ...... Do you know the definition of a poem? No, seriously. I'm trying to give you constructive criticism. Do you understand what defines a poem?
A poem doesn't require the ability to rhythm, a poem can even be a picture. Don't be so full of your self and that isn't constructive criticism thats called Hate.
If you don't believe me, well then you don't know the definition as I have been doing poetry since I was age 10 and I've aced every single poetry assignment up until my grade 11 year, I've even had one of my teachers cry while reading my assignment.(tear drop on paper is still there to this day, lol) |
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Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 3:24 pm
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 12:55 am
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monckey77 egoxromantic ...... Do you know the definition of a poem? No, seriously. I'm trying to give you constructive criticism. Do you understand what defines a poem? A poem doesn't require the ability to rhythm, a poem can even be a picture. Don't be so full of your self and that isn't constructive criticism thats called Hate. If you don't believe me, well then you don't know the definition as I have been doing poetry since I was age 10 and I've aced every single poetry assignment up until my grade 11 year, I've even had one of my teachers cry while reading my assignment.(tear drop on paper is still there to this day, lol)
I agree. As long there is a feeling that's being expressed, it's poetry. |
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 1:00 am
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 1:02 am
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 8:40 am
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cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word
"Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one.
your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent.
c; |
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Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2011 7:29 pm
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monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c;
thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. |
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 6:23 am
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cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great.
That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. |
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:28 pm
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monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget.
thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro.
here something just for you:
you are my all
always there even with out my call
I've turned you into my coverall
so when my tears are to dewfall
your love is soon to befall |
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:31 pm
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cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro. here something just for you: you are my all always there even with out my call I've turned you into my coverall so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall
wait a sec, it sounds better like this:
you are my all
turning you into my coverall
your always there even with out my call
so when my tears are to dewfall
your love is soon to befall |
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2011 5:21 pm
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cereza91 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 monckey77 cereza91 what do you guys think of this: Waiting is all that I can muster As another night falls To that of which is my time Entice me was your words Time and time again Guide me now as you did Interfering with the hands of fate Reminding to all who fall Love is but more than a mire word "Muster", What an amazing word. Never knew that one. your poem is quite powerful, you got a talent. c; thanks for the complement, but honestly it's not all that great. That's another talent, if you can't seem to think it's great and you always try and fix it and make it better, eventually you get a work of art even time cannot forget. thanks. at least someone thinks that, unlike my older bro. here something just for you: you are my all always there even with out my call I've turned you into my coverall so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall wait a sec, it sounds better like this: you are my all turning you into my coverall your always there even with out my call so when my tears are to dewfall your love is soon to befall
Another beautiful one, thanks for that. |
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