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 Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 5:06 pm
Knife This Knife This blade Can you help me Can stop the pain Cut Blood Ruining down my leg Ruining down my arm This is my life This are my pain So just kill me now *bang* please comment on my deviantart account too if you like it click here
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Posted: Mon Jun 12, 2006 7:39 am
does anyone like my poerty
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Posted: Wed Jun 14, 2006 6:07 pm
I love the kind of poetry you write. a friend of mine has a very similar interest. btw that poem is really good
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Posted: Thu Jun 15, 2006 1:36 pm
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Posted: Mon Jun 19, 2006 7:29 pm
Would there be any chance that you would write another poem. i would love to hear them
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 10:15 am
ok this one i think you would like
In the shadow
In the night
I see my love pasting by
I scream for him
I cry for him
But he left me for another
I love him
I hate him
Is these what love is
If it is Im going to Die
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 3:19 pm
I really like that one. the only thing i would change is the last line. it seemed kind of sudden. i would probably change it to something like "If it is than there is nothing for me to live for" or something like that. keep them coming, i like reading poetry
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 8:13 pm
umm...that sounds good i'll true it
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 12:44 pm
TheJynx ok this one i think you would like In the shadow In the night I see my love pasting by I scream for him I cry for him But he left me for another I love him I hate him Is these what love is If it is Im going to Die weird... thats how i felt a few months ago! but, i'm okay and he came back ^^ by the way, its a good poem
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Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 3:22 pm
thanks a guys i love got girlfriend when i was on vaction so im sad and mad
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Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 7:14 am
Great poems I really like them. smile
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Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 11:56 am
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Posted: Sun Jun 25, 2006 7:17 am
Those are good, keep up the good work ^_^
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Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2006 2:52 pm
They are generic. But generic good in the sense that anyone can feel what you're saying.
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Posted: Thu Jun 29, 2006 2:01 pm
thanks you guys are all so nice
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