The Writing Thread

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

Thyme Willowbrook

The poem is okay, I guess.

I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again.

Shadow-Savant

Ok here's a poem I wrote YEARS ago before I even knew that poetry could be devoid of rhyme.

lawl, this is really quite cute. I can tell that you were pretty young, and alsothat this is probably for a girl. Thanks for sharing. Anybody else willing to submit anything from when they were young?

Nebel Rabenschwarz

I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop

Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl  

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MrJimmy

Thyme Willowbrook

The poem is okay, I guess.

I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again.

Don't apologize. I just forgot to edit out the quote. *shrugs* Fixed now.  

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

Thyme Willowbrook

Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser

Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job.  

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

Thyme Willowbrook

MrJimmy

Thyme Willowbrook

The poem is okay, I guess.

I don't mean to be a pest, and thank you for the complment on the short piese I submitted, but I asked people specificly not to quote entire pieses of writing, it's okay for now, but next time just cut it down to the parts you want to talk about. Sorry again.

Don't apologize. I just forgot to edit out the quote. *shrugs* Fixed now.

Oh, thank you!  

[Stormlight]

MrJimmy

Thyme Willowbrook

Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser

Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job.

Thanks muchly. And yes, actually. It was published a few years back. Although I don't think the book is in print anymore.

And no, it wasn't published by Poetry.com. For one thing, it's way too long for that place, and for another, I have much higher standards than that.

whee  

[Jolly Rotten]

MrJimmy

Nebel Rabenschwarz

I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop

Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl

Close, but no cigar. wink Swedish. :3 But I haven't written anything in quite a while so my old ones are just... Not me. I'll post the one I'm writing on now when it's finished. :3  

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

Nebel Rabenschwarz

MrJimmy

Nebel Rabenschwarz

I write... Just not in english.. sweatdrop

Well What language is it in, if it's German, I could probably get the gist of it. Submit it anyway! We'll break out the translators! rofl

Close, but no cigar. wink Swedish. :3 But I haven't written anything in quite a while so my old ones are just... Not me. I'll post the one I'm writing on now when it's finished. :3

Awsome!

*yells* Hey guys! I got a Sweedish guy to post!  

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

Thyme Willowbrook

MrJimmy

Thyme Willowbrook

Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser

Wow... speachless. This is the kind of quality poem I expect to see published someday, if it isn't already. Great job.

Thanks muchly. And yes, actually. It was published a few years back. Although I don't think the book is in print anymore.

And no, it wasn't published by Poetry.com. For one thing, it's way too long for that place, and for another, I have much higher standards than that.

whee *awe struck*

*Yells* Hey guys! I got a person who was published to post!  

[Shadow-Savant]

MrJimmy

Shadow-Savant

Ok here's a poem I wrote YEARS ago before I even knew that poetry could be devoid of rhyme.

lawl, this is really quite cute. I can tell that you were pretty young, and alsothat this is probably for a girl. Thanks for sharing. Anybody else willing to submit anything from when they were young?

Actually it wasn't for anyone in particular. I'd never even had someone interested in me when I wrote that. I just had it come to me so I wrote it down. confused I don't know what the inspiration was or why I wrote it. That was when I was 19 actually, almost 5 years. Feels like more since I've grown a lot more over the past 4 years than I had in all my teenage years.  

[ForsakenAngels]

I would read that.. but I'm too tired (1:30 in the mourning, and I haven't gotten a full nights rest in weeks)
So I'll write a poem thing instead off the top of my head
(stupid music wil lthrow me off... )

I sits in a shadowed corner
somewhere in my mind
whereI can control these thought of mine
Where I can control these flowing tears...
WHy can't I just, hold my fears?

(that was too short lol)

There was once a man who lived long ago
and many a man claimed he was hero
He held the rock at bay while the otehrs ran
He sure was one hell of a man
And as soon as they were clear he started to cry
For he knew he was about to die
And he let go of that mighty boulder
And he pushed to the ground and was pinned under
as the rock went flying back on down the hill
The sounds of his bones snapping was sharp and shrill
There's a plaque on the cursed stone
Laying at the bottom of the valley, all alone
It's shining words are even set in gold
'Through death this rock has shown
That a single man can't stand alone'  

[ForsakenAngels]

Thyme Willowbrook

Hopeless Love (Confronting the Villain)
by S. Houser

Simply amazing 3nodding Had fun reading it.... Rate it higher then any non-professional poem I've read yet. And higher then alot of professional ones as well  

[Anti Raven]

A spontaneous piece, out of need.

Twilight

And where shall we meet?
Words whisper into the streets
pitter patter, rain falls to the ground
eyes lock, hopes found

But where shall we meet?
a question so sweet
harder, rain pounds into your hair
lips lock, so unfair

For where shall we meet?
no longer feel my feet
pitter patter, rain slows to a drawl
hand lock, let go I never shall.

 

[Jessi_Babii_10_13_90]

twilight365

A spontaneous piece, out of need.

another masterpiese from Twilight. *snaps*  

[a d0t.]

twilight365

A spontaneous piece, out of need.

Twilight

poem here.

The overall feeling of this is greeeat. <33 But there are rough parts, as in most poems. ;3

"rain pounds into your hair" is just too long for this short poem. :3
"no longer feel my feet" i don't understand this. maybe if you explained it to me?
drawl and shall don't rhyme, shall is a higher "a" sound than drawl.