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 Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 1:44 pm
This is one of my poems that I did along time ago, I hope you enjoy. Do I need to give a fee of any sort? you said something about contributing to this thread.
Alone
Blizzard within darkness falling at last
Standing there waiting for the last stands
Will everyone depart to summer fleeing away
You secertly wish for them to stay
The demon with in threatens to take prey
Only the brain singing music while melting away
The ray of light disintegrate in dismay
Not a warning as the train runs away
It will come back soon to laugh at this day
They will tell you to forget and love them anyway
If not don't worry amnesia's on the way
To cure your illness and free the brain
But even amnesia will not stop a little rain
Or the pain of dying in a dark alleyway.
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 2:07 pm
No, no fee required, what I meant by contributing was that people should contribute their works.
I'll add you to the Original Post soon.
Also, I couldn't respond to your PM due to the friends only restriction, keep that in mind when pming non-friends.
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Jafthasleftthebuilding Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 2:09 pm
WhiteFangGirl06 Do I need to give a fee of any sort? you said something about contributing to this thread. Contribution being just what you did: Submitting a piece of work. biggrin -Tsuji [EDIT] Hey Jaft.
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 7:32 pm
I updated my project's post with a few new poetry written this year.
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Posted: Mon Oct 22, 2007 1:58 pm
Jaft No, no fee required, what I meant by contributing was that people should contribute their works. I'll add you to the Original Post soon. Also, I couldn't respond to your PM due to the friends only restriction, keep that in mind when pming non-friends. k
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Posted: Mon Oct 22, 2007 3:31 pm
life fading,
darkness grows.
clasp thy palms on the winter let rose.
Claim no victim,
only cry out.
for an endless dream,
as death is about.
...not my best, but i think its nice...
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 5:28 pm
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Posted: Fri Oct 26, 2007 5:44 pm
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Jafthasleftthebuilding Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 3:32 am
Hey...
I'm sorry I haven't been reading and reviewing everyone's hard work. I'm sure I'll get around it to January because I have vacation.
Keep writing, share your stories and poetry with us. Always keep that pen moving or those hands typing.
Create! Dream! Imagine your world as you see it to be.
Well, I now put up two new poems of my own. My most recently finished. I thought about putting up old ones, but who cares about those?
Well, let us all write and make our fantasies real, at least on paper.
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 3:51 am
._. Why do both your poems have to include the main character pantsless?
Oh...Well...I guess that's a silly question....Moving on. sweatdrop
The one thing I'll recommend is that you change "I'll never ignore" to "I can't ignore". Other than that, you're made in the shade. The cake poem made me giggle (as well as sympathize with the main character. =w=), and the second poem certainly had the desired effect, I think.
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Jafthasleftthebuilding Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 3:55 am
I can't change that part of the line or it doesn't keep with my strange 7/8/7/8 syllable scheme that I used.
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Also "can't" is an ugly word. Lol.
And I never, until you pointed it out, noticed that both of them go without pants.
The first one, comedic effect, the second one, a funny memory.
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 4:03 am
lol Heh, alright.
And.....Memory? o-o
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Jafthasleftthebuilding Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 4:11 am
Aaaah, the character's memory, you perverted girl! eek
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 4:12 am
Well, wouldn't that also just be for comedic effect, then? o-o Not an entirely separate category?
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Jafthasleftthebuilding Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Dec 24, 2007 6:05 am
The thing is, with Mein Kampf, it was just completely for a comedic effect, while in My Name Is Bob, it's a funny memory of joy that is in heavy contrast with the second part of the poem.
When the memories are not as happy...
>.>
Lol.
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