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 Posted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 8:08 pm
Just wanted to post some of my poems as I get them finished. I would LOVE feedback on what could be changed or that you just liked it.
But beware. Some of my stuff can get gruesome at times. Just letting you know beforehand.
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A lonely soul... Broken heart…Calling me with fear…hopelessness
The mere aroma of these call me
And despite her surprise…ah Yes humans need to communicate
Need of guidance…
Let me be the guide
So desperate…even knowing who I am
She wants someone to hear her out…
Hn...I will
For all I care, it’s her dying wish…
How worthy her life is
A simple game of guessing
With a simple crystal, I’ll decide her fate
And she clings to the chance…so tightly
She doesn’t realize what I mean
With the sacrifice of her loss
And the broken heart does not comprehend her future
Clinging to the soul-stealer
The gambler of souls
And offering the only thing I’d need
Her soul
A gentle touch…
Soothing words…
My last kindness…
The soul she didn’t think of as worthy…
Becomes a part of me, my nourishment
And you Death?
You were late
Clean up the soulless body on your way out
I won again Lucifer.
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Posted: Wed Oct 20, 2010 5:22 pm
BUMP! I know it's odd to do that but I'm not getting any feedback on this and I would personally love some.
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