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 Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 10:15 am
I wrote a song, and I want to know what you guys think.
Sinking
I can feel my heart receding
losing feeling
losing hope
not sure if I am still breathing
pushing up the downward slope
And I
I know you don't smile for me
My heart is shrinking
I know its only her you see
my world is sinking
now I drown 'cause I can't swim
in this ocean of emotion I've landed in
bottomless and cold
like a movie quicksand hole
I'm sinking
I'm sinking
Not the type to be flirtatious
never dreamed I'd
ask you first
didn't mean to be outrageous
staying silent wouldn't hurt
like this
I know you don't smile for me
My heart is shrinking
I know its only her you see
my world is sinking
now I drown 'cause I can't swim
in this ocean of emotion I've landed in
bottomless and cold
like a movie quicksand hole
I'm sinking
I'm sinking
You know they say there's only so far down to go
I wonder will I one day look up and see the glow
or do I just keep sinking
'cause
I know you don't smile for me
My heart is shrinking
I know its only her you see
my world is sinking
now I drown 'cause I can't swim
in this ocean of emotion I've landed in
bottomless and cold
like a movie quicksand hole
I'm sinking
I'm sinking
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Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 4:15 pm
Wow, that was really cool, it flows well, ryhmes in the right places, I like it very much! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 5:44 pm
zphal_girl87 Wow, that was really cool, it flows well, ryhmes in the right places, I like it very much! biggrin Thanks! mrgreen
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Posted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 6:22 am
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Posted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 8:15 am
I like it. I wonder though, what kind of tune and rythm you were going to put this to because this would be great in a rap song.
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Posted: Wed Jun 14, 2006 10:17 am
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Posted: Wed Jun 14, 2006 11:46 am
Now I just need to hear it with music. biggrin I think it's great.
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Posted: Wed Jun 14, 2006 12:02 pm
I love it! its very expressive and flowy...ish...is flowy a word? anyways, i loved it.
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