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 Posted: Mon Sep 24, 2007 11:47 am
Ignorance taught in schools today
Professionals bullshit for their pay
Caring little for the effect on tommorrow
Social security to stifle their sorrow
Willing to let us go down the drain
Let us be lead by one without a brain
Some still do it for a noble purpose
Give us knowledge in hope that we will surpass
Even the greatest minds of moments past
These are the ones that ensure are kind will last
PM me if you'd like me to write you something, otherwise just post here.
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 3:10 pm
they say a man is lost,
with no love,
i find it true.
i am lost in this dark world,
for to long i have lust,
but i understand this,
to love is to walk on air,
to live is like swimming the sea,
to lust is like trying to stand up while all else falls,
to learn is to find light in everlasting darkness,
to hate is like buring yourself.
you have to crawl before you can walk
walk before you can talk
talk before you can learn
learn before you can teach
teach before you can burn
burn befor you can prech
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Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 2:00 am
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Posted: Thu Nov 22, 2007 11:52 pm
aztec-ninja Ignorance taught in schools today Professionals bullshit for their pay Caring little for the effect on tommorrow Social security to stifle their sorrow Willing to let us go down the drain Let us be lead by one without a brain Some still do it for a noble purpose Give us knowledge in hope that we will surpass Even the greatest minds of moments past These are the ones that ensure are kind will last PM me if you'd like me to write you something, otherwise just post here. Watch your spelling. Your rhyming sounds forced. Some good ideas, you just need to find a better way of expressing.
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Posted: Fri Nov 23, 2007 8:54 am
topic is good and a poem doesn't always need to rhyme its the emotion that is felt from reading the poem that counts. Only thing i wud do is mask my words and play around with them a little more, unless what you were going for is a blunt statement.
-Cris
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 1:51 am
I really like the poems on this page.
The bluntness of the first one suits it well.
The second is just fun (yes I know it's not ment to be fun and that I can't spell but thats how I percieved it.)
Pixie
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 3:53 pm
SilverTalion aztec-ninja Ignorance taught in schools today Professionals bullshit for their pay Caring little for the effect on tommorrow Social security to stifle their sorrow Willing to let us go down the drain Let us be lead by one without a brain Some still do it for a noble purpose Give us knowledge in hope that we will surpass Even the greatest minds of moments past These are the ones that ensure are kind will last PM me if you'd like me to write you something, otherwise just post here. Watch your spelling. Your rhyming sounds forced. Some good ideas, you just need to find a better way of expressing. agreed the rhyming seems kinda forced
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 4:17 pm
i have a few but im too lazy to post them all so if u want to see u can just go to my postings in the forum thingy (im not very computer literate)
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Posted: Wed Nov 28, 2007 4:26 pm
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Posted: Sun Dec 30, 2007 1:20 pm
pxyvalkerie I really like the poems on this page. The bluntness of the first one suits it well. The second is just fun (yes I know it's not ment to be fun and that I can't spell but thats how I percieved it.) Pixie lol thanks
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