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 Posted: Sun Aug 03, 2008 12:12 pm
Heres a poem that I wrote during study hall second semester. I don't have a title, but if you think of one please tell me.
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Join the club
You thought you were in love
But from the very start
He planned to break your heart
You thought that it would last
But then it ended fast
Cause he was just a jerk
That’s why it didn’t work
He was perfect wasn’t he?
It’s time to face the truth honey
He really was no good
You’ve cried way more than you should
He was nothing but a fake
I know it’s hard for you to take
But now it’s time for you to move on
Cause if you don’t then he’ll have won
I’ll always be right here
So don’t even shed a tear
But even if you do
I’ll be standing right by you
We’ve been friends since the very start
And friends can mend a broken heart
The pain you feel will never last
So get out there and have a blast
You deserve so much more
So pick your heart up off the floor
Cause I’ll be standing next to you
With some chocolate and some glue
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Please tell me what you think.
I also have it posted in the writting arena, so it would be really nice if you could vote for it there. The link its below.
http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=100016569
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Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 7:39 pm
Good poem. Ehhh how about the title, "Crushed Help" or "You're Special"? lol I don't know you put a two topics together but it works XD.
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Posted: Mon Jan 26, 2009 10:10 pm
awsm
haha poems rule
and lets see titles hummm
A good friend knows
Friends will help fix ur heart
um yeah well sorry not good at tittles haha
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Posted: Wed Jan 28, 2009 10:31 pm
title suggestion- "You're Not Alone"
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Posted: Tue Feb 03, 2009 9:21 pm
It's a good poem 3nodding
As for a title, hmm, I'm not really good with thinking up those xd
But I'll give it a shot, here's a couple suggestions:
"Friends Are The Best Painkiller"
"A Real Friend Knows Best"
"Good Friends Are Better Than Chocolate And Glue"
Eh, I gave it a shot xd Hope you figure out a title you want!
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Posted: Mon May 04, 2009 4:15 pm
It's pretty good. Not the best poem I've ever read but Very good for something you did in study hall.
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