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Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2010 7:30 pm
A Kingdom in Distress By Eunice Charles Introduction A kingdom is mostly run by a king and a queen. A good kingdom is usually a happy one a strong one with good warriors some of the warriors were born with gifts and powers.The Heavenly Kingdom was once a prosperous kingdom all the people were happy they loved their king and queen this kingdom was happier then ever but then devestation hit the kingdom the King fell ill and he was dieing.The queen was expecting but that was a secret that only she and her royal maid knew about.To make things worse the Kings brother Philipe was next in line for the throne, but Philipe was not a good man. His heart was filled with hate and wrath.Philipe was the eldest of the two but King Joenane was picked for king instead of Philipe.When king Joenane died Philepe tried to kill the queen, Serina, But she ran away at 7 months pregnant.The new king Philipe sent out for her to be found then killed.The queen went away and was not found she hid in a cave that soon became her home. Her Royale maid Joy and her husband Germing went to aid the queen.The queen became worried for her kingdom and for her babies,she was having twins,she began to worrie so much she became ill.Her saddness made her weak so her body gave up and when it came time to give birth the queen died but before she died she saw her beautiful baby girls ,she named the twins, the eldst which was born first was Heaven Hope Viktrin and the other was Jay Dee Viktrin. Joy and Germing gave the queen a respectfull traditional funeral they dressed her most beautifully and burned her.Joy and Germing returned to the kingdom packed there belonginggs and moved away as nomads,they chose to raise the twins and then they would tell the girls of ther mother and father and how they were royalty.
Heaven, was the eldest by an hour, had a gift she could control water and she could make the weather and seasons change Jay could produce fire from her body and with her mind and she could also fly, soar in the skys like the birds she was a free spirit she and her sister Heaven were the first royalty to ever have such gifts. The girls were trained to fight and defend themselves by there father Germing. Jay Dee was a natural at handaling a very inique sword it was called a chakram Germing Fabricated it with his own hands when Jay tried to use a regualr sword it was too complicated, he curved the blade into a circle and the the center bottom he placed a handle made of leather and he sharpend the top and that was Jay's special weapone. Heaven did not like swords she used a bow, she made her own bow. There was a magical tree that grew in a forbidden jungle only 3 men in the world had gone in and come back out alive all the other men that tried to go in would be killed as the went in to the jungle. Heaven at the age of 13 went in to the jungle but she was not attacked by any of the beasts or natives on the contrary she was blessed by the native's cheif he gave her a peice of wood of the giant tree that stood smack down in the center of the jungle. This tree would cure all the sick and injured the tree sap made a person young again wen drank once but it killed you if drank twice. Heaven was taught the art of making a long lasting bow and arrow she learned quickly she and she then made hers and it was painted white with the blood of a mystical bird that bleed white. Then witch doctor of the tribe had seen the future Heaven would be in, he knew of her powers he knew she could be a goddess amoung those weak human beings but he also read her heart and her heart was good and so kind she did not yern for power and fame, no she yerned for love and happiness.Heaven Hope Victrin and Jay Dee Victrin would becom legands, heros,and they would make history.
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Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 2:31 pm
I really liked it. It drew me and and kept me reading its very interesting and its your own idea. The names are unusual, that i like a lot i believe it adds loads of character. I think this will be an amazing story i hope i can read it all.
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Posted: Thu Feb 10, 2011 3:12 pm
THNK U SO MUCH I HAVR WORKED SOOO HARD ON THIS I LOVE THIS STORY I WANT TO MAKE IT SOMETHING OTHERS WILL LOVE ASWELL
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