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[Novel] When Day Breaks

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FoxyNightPrincess

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 19, 2010 4:22 pm


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PostPosted: Mon Sep 20, 2010 12:07 pm


Aside from a few typos and a grammar here or there, this was very well done. And really emotional. I could see this as a full story, no problem.

I don't know if I could finish it, though. I started to tear up when Skye started talking.

Books almost never make me cry.

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 20, 2010 1:46 pm


aww thank you thank you. yeah it's still rough but i figured i'd stop and just write it for now and then go back when it's done and see what needs fixing.

i'm so glad it made you emotional that was my goal for this scene. hell it even made me bawl my eyes out.
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