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This thread is a place where you can post your poems and receive comments on them 3nodding I started with one of my own...hope it's good sweatdrop (ahem)Anyway,please enjoy the tread! blaugh  

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(untiled for now)

When the moon is full,
She imagines her true love
Watching the same stars.

Her kindred spirit
Who she knows so well,although
They have never met.

Her heart believes fate
Binds together those who are
Meant for each other.

Until she finds him,
Her heart opens for no one,
Save only for love  

[thunderstorm101]

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(untiled for now)

When the moon is full,
She imagines her true love
Watching the same stars.

Her kindred spirit
Who she knows so well,although
They have never met.

Her heart believes fate
Binds together those who are
Meant for each other.

Until she finds him,
Her heart opens for no one,
Save only for love

It was OK, but rhyme and rythm were almost non-existant. Could use some work, but all in all, you've got a not so bad thing going here.  

[thunderstorm101]

Dragon Fire

Dragon's flame,
Burning bright,
Showing clearly in the night.

Firestorm,
Spinning past,
Not truely seen unless you're fast.

Leather-wings,
Beating strong,
You'll survive unless I'm wrong.

 

[jayjaystillhere]

Love and its Victims


Love is an experience
Love is something you can have
Love is something worth having
Love comes with a price
Love comes with joy
Love comes with happiness
Love comes with a downfall
Does Love choose its victims?
How is it hard to get when sometimes it just falls in your arms
You can benefit love
You can hate love
Or you can live without love
Amazing how love plays its role in our lives
It toys with us
destroys us
helps us grow
give us that feeling of comfort
And amazing how both very far and very near it is to us
Love is not for all of us sometimes
But we all know that we have a choice
Some of us are held back from love
Some want love but can’t have it
Some want to get away from it
Some need it
Some want to experience it
Some want to hold in the palm of their hand
Some...turn their back on it
What is Love?
Some say it is person
Some say it is a thing
Some say it is an event
But......will I ever know what it is exactly?




By: Jerome Johnson, Jr.  

[Kai_Cum_Cua]

I liked reading the second poem Thunder wrote. It had a nice rhythm and easy to understand.  

[Kai_Cum_Cua]

Horse

Do not treat me like a horse
I am not a working breed
Do not load weight upon my back
I am not of the laboring class
Do not pat me on the head
I do not eat oats or hay
Do not teach me to perform tricks
I am not trained to prance
Do not treat me like a horse
I am not someone’s pet  

[Sargent Sheep]

Dread it sways with the howl of the wind
It gnaws at your mind like a cat in heat
Then destroys your conscience
And then moves on

Dread it moves from house to house
Stealing sleep and the souls of others
Leaving them lonely
And then moves on  

[furied-flower]

1. Love's Pain


The bride was there on the floor,
Valentine's it was.
The groom came in,
dead he knew for sure.

The pain of love was unkind,
Tears in his eyes.
All the happy memories,
Running through his mind.

The funeral was painful,
Quietness took over.
Photo's of her lovely face,
No-one dressed up shameful.

One smiling face in the crowd,
The bride herself, a ghost.
Sending love throughout the room,
To those whom need the most.




2. Valentines curse


Every day on valentines,
A love is thrown away,
Someone dies and someone's born,
It happens on this day*

But today after valentines,
An apology is made,
A scarf, a star, never accepted,
it's far too delayed*

Then at last the guilt sets in,
And you go say sorry,
They give you back all the gift's,
and a love-shaped lolly*

Finally, love is made,
everyone is happy,
but then you know when you break up,
they will all feel really crappy!



3. Heart Stealer


Watch out, watch out!
The heart stealers about!
He takes away your love.

His smile, His charms,
His lovely tanned arms,
You really can't resist!

He takes your heart and runs away,
He doesn't come back for days and days.
Then you finally realise he's... gone.

So, watch out, watch out.
The heart stealers about.  

[furied-flower]

Please feel free to critizise and comment on my work.  

[...[N].ight.[R].ain...]

~Despair~
Sometimes it's a view of the shattered moon,sometimes it's a walk in the stormy night.
Sometimes it feels like that you want to cry,as the dry tears never come out.
Sometimes you are simply avoiding someone,because you just want to say:"Leave Me Alone."
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But the day will pass,and the blue will fade.There you are,gathering the presence of joy.
When you see the rainbow,after the helpless rain.Be pround of yourself,for not giving up at all...  

[Kieanna Hyuga]

Flowers from heaven

Stretch to the air,
tell me what you see.
Flowers from heaven?
great gods from the sea,
tell me,
tell me what do you see?
the flowers that you grow?
With more beauty than anyone can be.
from the charms of heaven,
stars of the night,
they crumble and fall
from your very sight.


I like criticism  

[Winter_Tale]

The Ghost of Me

I'm the ghost everyone can see
A shadow of my human life
Pale and weak barely hanging on
To this mortal existence
Many think they know me
But all they can see
Is the ghost of me
The ghost with brown hair and blue eyes
The one with a cheery smile and caring personality
The ghost of me
They think they see me
They only see what I want them to see
Never the darkness of my heart or my sweetest dream
My passions,my fears,and the beauty of my tears
My protective nature,my quirks and my alure
The world I created to hide from reality
The little things that matter to me
No
They only see
The ghost of me

note: I think I have spelling error and probably other stuff but I still love it