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Posted: Sat Jan 27, 2007 10:51 am
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 12:06 pm
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Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 2:20 pm
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Ok. I really like it, but I think it would look better with some punctuation, a bit of moving around, and less of the word 'then'. I'm not going to steal your poem, but I think it would look better like this. Dread; It sways with the howl of the wind. It gnaws at your mind like a cat in heat. It destroys your conscience, And then moves on.
Dread; It moves from house to house Stealing sleep, and the souls of others, Leaving them lonely, And then moves on.
Since 'Dread' is your theme, it should stand out instead of blending in. Anywho, keep up the excelent poems.
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Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:40 am
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