What Answer Can I give...

[Moon_Wolf_0001]

Breaking to pieces, what answer can I give
A shattered heart can only cry but once
Before they fail to love again
A price to be paid dearly for...

Though it's bleeding from open wounds
It's your touch that they crave
Whispering for that brief contact
A heart to be reopened in hate

Your gentle caresses drive me insane
When next they can prove fatal
But I can not leave for my broken body
Wants to exist only for you...

My demise is very clear in my mind
A soul to be abandoned in hope
Slipping from a dangerous place
What answer can I give



Literally a spontaneous poem...please I could use good constructive criticism!  

[Kaime no Go]

I like it. Um, a little punctuation would be good here and there. For example, after "what answer can I give" add a question mark. I like the idea around it. All that doubt and resignation I felt from it was very inspiring. Great job.  

[hanafan36]

I like it! I bet you'll end up in the poetry books soon! biggrin  

[Moon_Wolf_0001]

eh! eek the books...b-but... sweatdrop im not that great...  

[hanafan36]

well, maybe not yet...but I'm sure you'll only keep improving. biggrin