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My life is full of hatred its wicked evil and mean my life is full of hatred its best i go unseen my life is full of hatred as i walk the halls of this school my life is full of hatred better if i dont act cool my life is full of hatred this i know for a fact my life is full of hatred so why dont you go think bout that my life is full of hatred its wicked evil and mean my life is full of hatred its better i go unseen yea i wrote this in school one day idk...comment plz

Posted by: Jinxed_lette Thu May 22, 2008 @ 02:40am

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Necroyuki
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Commented on: Mon Jun 09, 2008 @ 04:13am


	i likes it its wicked as hell MCl hun

Commented on: Fri Jul 04, 2008 @ 07:48am


	all of your poems are really good. can you teach me? i suck at writing poems! lol they are really good. dont let nething stop you ! u could be great one day! biggrin ttyl.

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Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 10:03pm


	this one is very good it has that teen angst feel but it works becasue so man people know waht it means i like it rhyme pattern great if these were in a book i would by the book just so i could recite these poems

Commented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 11:36pm


	since i mentioned it in every other comment, im going to say that your flow here is quite improved. all i can really say is work on your wording some... focus on the loneliness and outcasting you are trying to express. and btw, i love the repetition of the first stanza as the last, but i don't think that it works good with those. definitely worth your time if your willing to put some work into it.

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