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Diary of a Vampire Neko Ninja
"Shiguray-Kun gave me this book for my birthday i shall treasure this for the rest of my life".
Jorney to kaede's village
i Kisuki walking to kaede's village, her village was quite not far i arrived in the village with my shikigami akiko and tsume i went in to kaede's hut to have some words with her. "hello kaede". the old priestess was siting on her hut floor making some soup. "what brings ye here kisuki"? said the old priestess with her soft voice."i wish to know where kikyo is". "ye have not seen kikyo since she came over to have a little chat". "hmm, i was just asking about that i must be off i have some other work to other stuff to do". i leave kaedes hut when i meet up with inuyasha. "feh what is a priestess like you doing here"? "if you truly wish to know then find out your self". i leave on my way to search for kikyo. then my soul collecters come and tell me that kikyo is not far from where i am at. i see kikyo perched up in a tree. "kisuki what a wonder full of visit". "kikyo you are seem a little troubled". "no, kisuki i am not troubled but i do want you to take this sacred arrow and use for emegency only". i then leave kikyo with a good bye.





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Shina-Sohma
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  • User Comments: [2]
    Wind-Misstress-Kagura
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    Mon Aug 11, 2008 @ 11:31pm


    i find you are moving to fast threw your story and there are many spelling mistakes, i would slow down and add some detail, like.

    "what brings ye here Kisuki ?" The old priestess Keade asked in her soft old voice. "I wish to know where Kikyo is" Kisuki asked in a calm tone as she watched the old Priestess make sup.

    it may take longer but more people will read it and understand it. but it is good, but i would go back threw and find your spelling errors and add some detail. But it is up to you what you do.


    Shina-Sohma
    Community Member





    Mon Aug 11, 2008 @ 11:58pm


    k thanks i fix it.


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