I miss you.

• Artist: SUNTEKE
• Description: I usually write poems, but recently decided to write a story about ninja's and sumarai's, and the causes of tsukune's suicide, tell me what you think bout what i wrote so far
  
• Date: 01/04/2009
• Tags: miss death ninja sumarai

Intro

Red floods my sleeves and fingers, sharp splinters from the gaping wound rip into my skin.
As i look into her eyes, only to find her look getting colder, she whispers three words;
''I... hate... you''

Chapter one: child hood

As a child I would walk through the woods with my mother, she would tell me tales of a great warrior called Azure - san, she would tell me how he was the greatest man to learn ninjitsu to have walked the face of the earth. Along with that she would tell me about how he was the biggest b*****d to walk the face of earth.

My mother was a strange woman, she was large, 6''2 to be precise.
she had blood red eyes and always wore a mask so i cant really remember her face.
She had a curvy, flexable body, large hips and carried a kunai and a shiny, red, sword.
Apart from that... I dont really know much about her, at the age of seven she left.
Leaving here blade and a not which read;

Dear tsukune,

I'm gone, i don't care about you, and i never will, your unwanted, the blade was your fathers, use it the same way he did.


save me the effort of doing it myself.

Comments

[Nihill]

I realize now that all sounded quite rude, and I apologize for that. I think it could turn out well.

[Nihill]

Be more precise with your capitalization - you use 'i' instead of 'I' a few times, the first letter of some sentences is not a capital - and with your punctuation. You don't need ellipses when a comma would work fine. And six feet is denoted with a single apostrophe, not a quote mark: 6'2. This whole thing is very vague, too.

[-St3qHaNi3-]

so far so good.

[jakethesnake00]

yessss iiit
is cool

[Mimi-chan Uchiha]

interesting... really good idea! One suggestion I have is to be a little more detailed about the whole thing, you don't need to rush. It's got real potential!

[thatthempersonthere]

0o its really good!