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Sitting in a dark, dank place,
The humid air fills my unwilling lungs.
The stench is nearly unbearable.
Dark green mold creeps slimly along the wooden walls.
My hands run against the wooden attic floor.
It is rough with jutting splinters cutting into my tender adolescent fingers.
There are no candles, no brightness.
I hear noises of people from outside.
People yelling and running,
Others warning their friends and family,
“Run,” they say, “run for your life”.
I feel fear over coming my small figure.
The fear seizes my body and shakes it viciously.
I close my eyes tightly.
Warm tears stream down my pale, thin cheeks.
I curl up in a tiny ball of bone and skin.
I hear footsteps drumming in my ear.
They are the footsteps of men, army men.
Their boots beat against the cobblestone street violently.
Left, right, left, right in a steady pattern.
The clanking metal of the guns hitting the belts is rattling harshly.
I look to the others in the room,
Rather, the immense fear upon their faces.
Some cry, some look to the ground.
Some show lost or forgotten hope.
They seem just as afraid as I.
I hear…screaming of children,
Screaming women and even proud men.
Loud words are bellowing from strong military voices.
There is a soft click and I knew what was to follow.
A loud fiery shot pierces the early morning air.
Then again, and again, and again.
Soon, there is nothing.
Nothing, but the most terrifying noise of all.
The absence of noise.
No more screaming.
No more begging.
No more crying.
Just silence.
Pure silence.
- by [-Quarantine-] |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/13/2008 |
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- Title: Silence
- Artist: [-Quarantine-]
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Description:
This poem just came to me one day. I extended it a bit before I put it on here.
My hope was to appeal to the senses as best I could and make it also seem pleasing to the ear.
Enjoy!~ - Date: 09/13/2008
- Tags: waiting fearing silence death begging
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Comments (7 Comments)
- [-Quarantine-] - 09/21/2008
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I wasn't really aware that poems had such restrictions.
It was my thought that it was a way to express that you're thinking.
Next time, I'll try and make my thought process more proper =) - Report As Spam
- Miss Amelia Pond - 09/18/2008
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is mostly audio.
But I only tear apart the phrasing because I really liked it, and want to see it even better than it already is.
Silly Gaia limits the post length.... Sorry I had to separate - Report As Spam
- Miss Amelia Pond - 09/18/2008
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I liked it, for the most part. What I did have a problem with, was the first stanza. Attics are rarely 'dank' - they get a lot of air circulation, unlike basements, which can be rather dank. Lungs are never unwilling- they're generally pretty darn grateful to have whatever air they can get, regardless of the quality. How can something creep slimily? The phrase "tender adolescent fingers" bothers me as well.
Other than that, it's just the "loud fiery shot". Fiery's a visual, and that stanza' - Report As Spam
- [-Quarantine-] - 09/18/2008
- Thank you all for reading, by the way!~
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- [-Quarantine-] - 09/18/2008
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Everyone didn't die xD;
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- lupe1979 - 09/17/2008
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Wow deep really cool how u killed every1
and im not being sarcastic it really is a great job - Report As Spam
- U-kno-U-want-2-B-me - 09/17/2008
- that was awsome
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