disappearing act

• Artist: Sings_to_the_moon
• Description: not my best but i feel the need to express my current feelings
  i no it dosnt rhyme but its free verse
  plz comment
  constructive critisism valued but plz no meanness
  also comment some of my others to
• Date: 12/27/2008
• Tags: disappearing

i crawl slowly into the darkest corner of my room
i hope no one can see me
im hideing go away!
all the pain i feel is a looming shadow

i ignore everyone who trys to reason with me
i will not come out
leave me alone!
i speak to no one and do nothing

i wait for the darkness to engulf me
take me away black winged angles
away from the crulety of the world
my only light is so far away

the only thing that can save me is him
no matter what they try
but he will not for he knows nothing
of my dissappearing act

i fall asleep and slip away
they try to bring me back
but i slowly fade away
i finaly disapeared

Comments

[Bad Evil Candy]

this is something that many people will love 2 read. 55

[King Exseada]

i know this world can be crule at times. i live to show what love and kindness really is.

[whitejade13]

I think it's a very nice piece of writing. And no, it doesn't rhyme but you show me where it says that all poems have to rhyme. Very nice. 5/5 smile

[KatsuNeko]

:O Overall the writing of it is good. The only thing needed to be fixed a little is the grammer and spelling.

Good Job~