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This life is a hell.
Each Breath is a waste.
Each cut was the flower, filling my vase.
- by AliceCullen1030 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/26/2009 |
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- Title: Life is a Hell
- Artist: AliceCullen1030
- Description: I wrote this one day in my room sitting in the dark. I don't know. I guess it is kind of depressing, but it is something that just popped into my head. Please tell me exactly what you think.
- Date: 01/26/2009
- Tags: life hell
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Comments (3 Comments)
- scitama - 03/23/2009
- More detail, and you could really come up with something big. I think you could wink
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- iGarth - 02/11/2009
- I assume this is a haiku so I don't agree with Cast Stick. A 5-5-9 one I think, if you change flow-er to flo'er. I really like it though. 4/5.
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- MeIanite - 01/29/2009
- If you expand it, and add more it would be a lot better. and I think you should go more into detail about why you think your life is such a hell hole, because you might find out that what you percieve as hell isn't no where near what others are experiencing in their everyday lives. 3/5
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