Behind Affectionate Eyes

• Artist: live4the123456s
• Description: This is the way i feel and maybe a lot of other girls when i like a guy who is taken this is my first poem posted so please dont laugh i just wanted to express my emotions.
• Date: 07/01/2009
• Tags: sadness love secrecy

It is you standing there a smile upon your face
For no smile gleams across mine
It is you who I cant resist when Im in your embrace
For it is me smiling foolishly,
And you, for knowing Im not fine


You are hers, but not so mine
Tears are drawn
But you, too kind
Wipe away my fears
But thou shall never hault
loving thy the way thou should
In secrecy

Comments

[Dragons Willow]

for a first, it's great!...yeah, been there, done that, bought the t-shirt. LOL! anyway...i would spruce up the ending a bit. the "thee/thou" lingo doesn't really fit the first stanza. but other than that...very sad, very sweet. 5/5

[ajskatergurl]

Add a different ending.. The ending should draw the reader more then the beginning

[I Am singer776]

i liked it had great flow but i think the ending was good but it kind of came out of nowhere but still loving it!