Realm of Darkness

• Artist: Unforgiven-Olrich
• Description: this explains how im feeling since me and my fiance broke up..
• Date: 01/26/2010
• Tags: relm darkness

Surrounded by Darkness, she blew out our flame.
Shattered on the inside.
Was all the love i gave her in vain?
Fallen to my knees, nothing and no one to hold me up.
The loneliness and the darkness, fill me up.
Nothingness surrounds me, a big empty space.
My once wonderful dreams, are now haunted by your beautiful face.
My heart has been shattered, and wanna know by who?
The one I love most.
I must be a pathetic love struck fool.
Am I alone, in this dark-felt place.
Without any one to love, with all my fears to face.
Alone i may be, without her by my side.
The Realm of Darkness, thats were i reside.

Comments

[thomulus]

I get what your trying to express, but it would be much better if you had proper rhyming, and timing. Try saying it out loud to get a better understanding of what I'm talking about. Your rhymes are also very basic, place and face, space and face, up and up, the one complicated one was flame and vain which don't even rhyme.....2/5