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the journal of pain and misery.....but yet somewhat..happiness
you will learn a lot of my horrible life...and the happiness i somehow feel
Fragment of my story
i wrote this for a school assignment but i was gonna put this scene in my story anyways so it may sound a little weird i still need to edit it but i want to knwo what every1 thinks so far ^^

One night, at about 11:00 p.m., a boy by the name of Vincent, tallish, light brown hair, was so taken in by the drama of the real world out there and all his emotional up-comings. With all this pain he has to live through with his dad beating him, his mom in jail, the girl of his dreams dating his worst enemy, and lets not forget Chad, the 1 she is dating he tortures him everyday at school never gives him a break. Vince, as everyone called him, was so emotionally distraught he just wanted it all to end. He climbed up out of bed and walked to the window. After about 5 minutes of trying to open the window without making any noise at all, he quietly climbs out and climbs down the tree right near his bedroom. Once down he starts walking towards the nearby city thinking every step he takes.
As Vince walked down the lonely cold streets of Amsterville, he could’ve sworn her hear a noise of someone, or something sneaking around. Vince started picking up the pace and walking faster. The sound started closing in on him as if he was being followed. He starts running now scared more then ever. The noise sounds as if its right being him, like something is hissing at him.
“Who’s there?” Vince asked nervously to the mysterious noise that seems to have been following him.
As he said that ready to fight whoever it may be, a cat comes out from the shadows and rubs up against his leg purring its soft purr.
“Oh, it’s just a cat;” he said with a load of relief “I bet your hungry huh?” Vince gave the cat some of the chips he took from his house right before he snuck out. “You better go on back home now” he sent the cat back in the direction it came from and watched as it disappeared into the shadows. As he began to turn around he ran into a wrinkly old man with a black cloak on and a cane with a skull on the top of it. “I’m sorry mister”
The old man stands there and says nothing.
“Well I’m going to go now,” Vince said standing up on his own and walking past the man. The man stood there saying and doing nothing at all.
As Vince turned a corner he saw the old man again. “Dude, I don’t have time for this leave me alone,” he said to the man, “creepy old dude,” he says under his breathe.
“Your parents were good, yes they were,” the man finally spoke.
“What are you talking about?” Vince said.
“They had to learn their lesson, and so you were born,” the man confused him more.
“Dude I don’t know you, so I’ll just walk away now,” Vince started getting freaked out.
“You were born, and they couldn’t handle it, didn’t have responsibilities, no they didn’t,” he said. “Eventually started fighting over who was better for you, they got a divorce and you ended up like this.”
“What do you know about my parents?” he said angrily.
“Your mom was best for you, but lost it she did, she ended up in jail and you with someone who abuses you.”
“Please just stop I don’t want to hear any more,” Vince screamed covering his ears.
“You were never supposed to exist Vincent Leviour.”
He took his hands off his ears and looked up, “who are you?”
“I am no one of important to speak, just a man trying to make a right.”
“You said I was supposed to be born right? RIGHT? Well what now huh? I’m born and my life sucks, what am I to do now? “Vince shouted with such anger as he started to walk away from the man”
“Life is yours; make it what you want it to be.”
“What does that mean?”
“You have to find that answer on your own.”
“Maybe I don’t even want to, maybe,” Vince takes a deep breathe “maybe I wish I wasn’t even born” after saying that Vince walks away into the darkness of the night.
“Your parents learn there’s now its time for you to learn yours, a lesson be taught and soon you will learn the true meaning of this world,” the old man said as Vince walks away. The old man smiles “sometimes you better watch what you wish for,” he laughs demonically as he disappears into the night.






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XxNefisxX
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commentCommented on: Mon Nov 23, 2009 @ 07:03pm
thats awesome u should finish it


commentCommented on: Mon Nov 23, 2009 @ 08:41pm
i think its good maybe instead of having him say im going to go now, just have him go or something



crescentmoonbaby
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J adore fraise une crepe
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commentCommented on: Tue Nov 24, 2009 @ 03:54am
this is a very good and interesting story [:
theres a lot of emotion that is expressed in the greatest way possible.
the suspense is definitely the thing that makes the person want to read more.
great job![:


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