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I know what I want i stare at my palm memories so fond it makes me so calm i find my peace of mind i feel what i've felt such a wonderful feeling i never want to forget this it holds so much meaning

Posted by: Shackled Soul Sun Jan 09, 2011 @ 06:36am

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animemiss00
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Commented on: Sun Jan 23, 2011 @ 02:47am


	Wow, impressive 8O I have one suggestion, though. The slant rhyme in the first stanza is a little bit awkward to read. It makes me think that th poem is going to rhyme for every line, but then "mind" comes in and I'm all "owo oh." XD That's just my opinion, though Other than that, it's really good! I'm no poet, so I can't even come close XD

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