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poem attampt "Iv seen the sun rise, and the sun set, iv seen the new moon, and the beuaty from the full moon, But yet i have yet to see your beauty, arise in your eye's, but behind thoughs beautifull eyes, lie the beauty of that i have seen, the sweetness of your voice, the sharpness of your mind, and the cleverness of your personality."

Posted by: Sword Tenria Wed Apr 05, 2006 @ 10:02pm

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Chias Computer
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Commented on: Thu Apr 06, 2006 @ 03:43am


	Grades: Meaning in Poem: excellent Sounding poetic: needs work Overall poem: Not bad I like you so this would be my actualy grading: heart heart heart

Commented on: Fri Apr 07, 2006 @ 09:42pm


	I think it sounds poetic enough^^ but thanks

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Siin Kazakura
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Commented on: Fri May 05, 2006 @ 11:46pm


	Spelling needs work, the meaning is a little overdone in poems today, and it sounds plagerized. Other than that, not bad.

Commented on: Sun Aug 26, 2007 @ 12:47am


	You will always be in my heart kitty...

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