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Holy ******, I made a new entry =0 EDIT:: I added more to the poem. The part that is in red is what I added. Please let me know what you think about it all. Yeah that was a long time between entries, but I went all "meeeeeeh poems suck" for a while, and I hadn't written anything new. BUT never fear, I have written something brand new and I shall post it here for you all to hate. I wrote it in like, 20 minutes and I just wrote it for the sake of writing something. It needs to be refined and lengthened at least. Enjoy the horridness. Stollen From Me She was your starshine your perfection your Rose your universe And I took her away from you How did it make you feel? To learn that with a flick of my wrist I had her on her knees begging sweetly begging to be set free And free I set her. Free of you. Free of your expectations your demands Free of your love. I stole her from you violently and you were utterly helpless to stop me from the sidelines watching utterly helpless you Pathetic as always, you were watching silently docile You didn't even move to stop me Just watched with your sad eyes So long have I waited to destroy you To erase you To forget you And with her removed it has become to simple so easy I can't help but smile in pure satisfaction the blood running from my knuckles as I smash my fist into your face smash it into the mirror and you are ----------------no -------------------more Remember, there are other poems to waste time on, more worthy than this one. surprised Comment now, plz kthnxdie. heart**

Posted by: Rass Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 09:33am

[b:723929a83e]A First On TV

This is the twentieth century,
you are there, preparing to skin
a human being alive. Your part
will be to remain calm.[/color:723929a83e][/b:723929a83e]

-David Ignatow[/color:723929a83e][/align:723929a83e]

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LetNgo
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Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 09:39am


	Very good cool

Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 10:10am


	Your poem is very good! It reminds me ofthis novel I read. Sin By Josephine Hart <3333

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Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 08:59pm


	love your poetry biggrin

Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 09:58pm


	I love your poetry!! heart I have some too in my journal on the first few pages. 3nodding

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Commented on: Sat Dec 31, 2005 @ 10:26pm


	oh I like. It's great. heart

Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 12:05am


	Violence. Nice poem. Emotions and pure unnecessary violence in one poem. So far I haven't seen anythin like this.. Very good!

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Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 01:41am


	pretty cool.... lol I cant write poetry for anything

Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 08:52am


	cool I love it rass tis awesome 3nodding

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Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 09:48am


	Whoa...I wasn't expecting that kind of ending....-claps-

Commented on: Sun Jan 01, 2006 @ 02:02pm


	That was great!

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Commented on: Tue Jan 03, 2006 @ 07:03am


	wow..kinda missunderstood i do believe

Commented on: Wed Jan 04, 2006 @ 08:46am


	i like that your poem doesnt rhyme and follow any type of prewritten pattern- thumbs up

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Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 10:53am


	You're very talented. I write poetry too! PM me yuo want to read some XP. Well great write and thanks for letting me read it. It was quite enjoyed. Cassandra

Commented on: Sun Jan 08, 2006 @ 07:01am


	i like it it shows alot of betrayel of into love and no understanding (not of the poem it was clear just the setting) and you showed how it felt to be loved abusivly and how some one saved her and in the end the other person was weak a bitter and coulnt take care of himself without her. he suffered.

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Commented on: Sun Jan 08, 2006 @ 07:56am


	very good. better than i could ever do

Commented on: Sun Jan 08, 2006 @ 08:56am


	Rass has talent...very angsty tho...but still good

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Commented on: Sun Jan 08, 2006 @ 12:23pm


	I liked the part with blood and hitting! domokun

Commented on: Mon Jan 09, 2006 @ 11:14pm


	i like it

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Commented on: Thu Jan 12, 2006 @ 04:08am


	Very good. The person seems really evil. But I like it, none the less.

Commented on: Sun Jan 15, 2006 @ 05:10am


	I lurve IT heart its pwnsome

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Commented on: Sun Jan 15, 2006 @ 06:07am


	I like it...Check out mine in mine please.

Commented on: Mon Jan 16, 2006 @ 01:01pm


	Very nice. heart Hopefully this poem wasn't based off personal experiences eek

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Commented on: Mon Jan 16, 2006 @ 08:11pm


	very good infact exellent well done the poetry i love it heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart heart u rass

Commented on: Thu Jan 19, 2006 @ 06:42am


	yum yum...good poem

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Commented on: Fri Jan 20, 2006 @ 09:48am


	Wow .. thats like .. deep, i luff it <33

Commented on: Sat Jan 28, 2006 @ 03:05pm


	Its like an anti love poem.Its nice to see a poem from the other perspective.

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Commented on: Thu May 04, 2006 @ 06:51am


	I like it. It's a little depressing, but it is catching.

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